Sunday, September 7, 2008

Rebecca & Junice by Julia D

In just two short hours Becca will be arriving in Harlem, New York to stay with her distant cousin Junice for the summer. A lot has happened this year with Becca, like the death of her beloved Grandmother, Gemma. Junice couldn’t make it to the funeral when Gemma died because her mother was being put in prison for drug possession and she needed to be there to take care of her sister. Becca feels sorry about the way Junice has to deal with her mother in prison and how the state is trying to put Junice and her sister in foster care, even though that’s the last thing Junice wants. Becca feels a little guilty not being there for her cousin this past year, but she had a lot going on too. Becca decided to take off for Poland shortly after Gemma died to learn more about who Gemma was, and what her life had been like. But her trip was over. She needed to go visit Junice who she hadn’t talked to since Gemma died. They had a lot to catch up on.
The plane begins it’s decent in New York. Junice would be at the baggage claim waiting for her. Becca safely gets off the plane, and heads straight to baggage claim. There she spots Junice wearing jeans and a t-shirt. She looks exactly the same as she’s always had, but somehow seems different. She has a glow in her face, almost as if she looks happy, which is something Junice rarely is. Usually she is always mad at the world for something, especially after her mom went to prison and the whole foster care thing.

“Junice, my goodness how are you! It’s been way too long!” Says Becca.

“I’m great, but I’ve got something really important to tell you. Lets grab your stuff and get a taxi, i’ll explain everything on the way home,” said Junice.

On the forty-five minute taxi ride into Harlem, Junice tells Becca about how she has met someone. This shocks Becca, which makes her beg Junice to tell her every single detail of how they met. Junice talks about her current boyfriend Damien. She goes on and on about Damien’s family, what he wants to do in the future and what he likes to do for fun. While listening, Becca is shocked that Junice was able to get close to anyone, but in a way she is very happy that Junice has finally found someone.

“Wow Junice, Damien sounds great! I am so happy for you! It sounds like you guys really like each other. But before you go on finishing the rest of your story, I want to talk to you about Gemma.”

“Oh my goodness yes! Your sister told me that you went to Poland, and how you were trying to find out about Gemma’s life and everything. What were you able to find out?”

Suddenly the taxi pulled up outside Junice’s Harlem apartment, Becca began to tell her cousin about her trip to Poland. She talks about how she got to Poland and had a translator help her travel and translate for her. She was also able to discover that their grandmother was actually a survivor of the Holocaust, and was persecuted because she was Polish and because of her Jewish belief.
“Whoa, hold up. Gemma was a Holocaust survivor?” Asks Junice.

“Yep, I had no clue until I met Josef who was a big help. Now sit tight I’m getting to the good part.”

Becca gets back into storytelling mode and goes on to tell Junice how Josef, a man she met while in Poland, heard about the awful torturing that was going on in the camps during the Holocaust. Josef later joined a secret group to help rescue victims. He and his group had set of for Chelmo which was a concentration camp. While spying on what went on inside the camp, he witnessed horrible things that people should never see. One night he noticed a woman with red hair still alive and breathing in a pile of bodies. He rescued this woman and preformed CPR on her. The women turns out to actually be Gemma, but she told Josef that her name was Ksiezniczka, which Becca explains to Junice that she found out it actually means 'princess' in Polish. And so the CPR that Josef preformed on Gemma refers to in her fairy tale as 'the kiss of life'.

“Ohhh so thats how that part ended up in the story that Gemma always told us.” Said Junice.

“Yep, but wait we are getting into the best part, when Gemma fell in love,” said Becca.

“Gemma had a boyfriend!? Get out!”

“Yes she did, but it’s rather sad, but ill keep going,” says Becca.

Becca starts off the story again, beginning with how Josef talked about Gemma falling in love with Josef’s friend Aron Mandlestein. He was also known as "the Avenger." Later on down the road, Gemma and their secret group were almost killed by Nazis, trying to hunt their group down, and Gemma then decided to marry Aron and take on the new name Gitl Mandlestein. Gemma used this name on her passport to America when Aron died.
“And so that’s Gemma’s story, and how she got the U.S,” says Becca.

“Fascinating stuff Becca. I’m so proud of you for taking this adventure on. You know, you were always Gemma’s favorite,” says Junice.

“Was not! She loved us all equally. Although I was the youngest and you guys would always pick on me!”

“Haha true. Hey what do you say we order some food catch up some more?”

“Sounds good to me.”

2 comments:

Anonymous said...

I think this was a very good story. i can picture the two girls talking to eachother, its a very realistic conversation. my favorite line in the essay was, “Wow Junice, Damien sounds great! I am so happy for you!" becasue i think it sounds like something s family member, or even a friend would say. my favorite part of the story is when becca is telling junice all about gemma, it's got a lot of good describtion, and it's intresting to read about.one thing i noticed was that it was all in present tence, i think if you would have said Becca got off the plane, instead of becca gets off the plane. i think it was a very good essay, one piece of advice would be have junice talk a little more, we know more about becca and Gemma then we do about junice.

Anonymous said...

After reading this story, i felt that Junice and Rebecca really liked each other. Through your writing you really created a sense of friendship between the two characters. i clearly remember Junice's reaction to Gemma having a boyfriend. It was very easy for me to see the pair at the airport, greeting each other. The idea that really stuck in my head was the description of Rebecca's reaction to Junice having a boyfriend. The story made me think of my cousins, because we do the whole nice-to-see-you-whats-up? catching up thing.
I think that the conversation between the two characters was very realistic. I think that the thoughts you included with the girls' responses made them seem very real.
"On the forty-five minute taxi ride into Harlem, Junice tells Becca about how she has met someone. This shocks Becca, which makes her beg Junice to tell her every single detail of how they met. " This part of the story was probably my favorite. I like this part because you did a very good job of conveying Rebecca's thoughts and emotions in response to Junice's good news.
One thing that jumped out at me when i was reading was the misuse of the conjunction "it's." in the sentence 'The plane begins it’s decent in New York,' it should be its. upon from that, nothing really struck me.
For future writing assignments, i would recommend reading the story just to check for the misuse errors.