David was thinking about home as he leaned his head on the airplane's window. He had thought of being up there with those very clouds at one point; away from the hurt, away from the hate, and away from his horrible life in San Francisco. The clouds looked so white and puffy, he wished he could glide above them, and never come down. He was on his way to England. They had just gotten over a war over there, and he wanted to escape the war inside of his tiny liquor-infused home. Waiting for him almost 3,000 miles away was a girl named Daisy. She was from the US, so she would know what it was like there, so David could have something in common wither her. She went to go live with her cousins the summer before the war and decided to move there five years after she had left it. David was hoping that Daisy would give him then luxury of food and maybe, just maybe, new clothes. This was something David hadn't gotten in months; and all because of his mother. David wasn't even sure if he could even call her his mother. She treated him horribly and beat him daily. She would burn him and once she even stabbed him. But what was even worse was that she loved each and every one of his five brothers very much. David would be sent to the basement to sit and wait to do the dishes while his family enjoyed each other company and the food they were given. David did not want to think about her anymore, because the clouds below him had started to get a little grey.
Daisy was waiting for a dirty, frail, little boy to come out of the gate. Thoughts raced through her head- but all of this wasn't going to be answered soon, because David then creeped out through the gate. He looked around, scared and alone, and Daisy's heart just melted. She walked over to him.
"David? David Peltzer?" She asked. The child looked up at her with the shiniest eyes she ever saw, she couldn't tell if they were tears-she hoped not! David slowly nodded.
"My name's Daisy. I'm going to be taking care of you for the summer," she said.
"Can it be forever?" the boy whispered.
"What?" Daisy asked.
"I never want to go back, please don't send me back!" David responded. Daisy's heart melted again. This poor boy seemed to have been through a lot.
"I won't... I promise" she said.
And then together, they walked out of the gate and to Edmond’s car. Daisy was thinking of Edmond. He had been going through a rough time ever since Daisy had left England five years ago. And even though she was back, he still seemed distant. David took some time to look around at where he was. He saw the puffy white clouds from underneath now. Although they looked the same as when he was up in the sky, he thought the above view was even better. Daisy started to drive down that long dirt road to her home, and thought that now was a good time to hear David’s life story.
“So, you’re from San Francisco? I lived in New York.” David just kept looking ahead. It was silent for another minute. “David,” Daisy continued, “its okay now. She won’t be able to get you now. You won’t get hurt anymore.”
“But she didn’t. I was clumsy. They were just accidents,” David lied. Daisy could see right through it too.
“Are you sure?” Daisy asked. David didn’t wasn’t to tell her the truth, it was as if his mother was right behind him, watching, listening to his every word. He almost forced himself to tell her.
“I deserved it though….I was bad….” said David. He wasn’t even sure if he should deserve Daisy. He didn’t deserve kindness. He hadn’t gotten it his whole life, so why start now?
“No David, no one ever deserves it-ever!” Daisy responded. “You are a good person, and you did nothing wrong. You’re free.”
David had heard this line before, when that detective had got him from school a few months ago. And only good things came after he said that. David wanted to trust Daisy, because anything was better than living back in San Francisco. And she promised he wouldn’t go back. ‘I can trust her,’ David though. ‘Yeah, I can trust her,’ and he looked ahead on the long road ahead.
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After reading this story i feel sad for this poor little boy named David. The images that kept running through my head as i read it were the visions of his mother beating him and him just taking it and not fighting back. After reading it I feel very sad and upset that there is someone out there that would habitually hurt their child like that. The story made me think about all of the sickos out there and how no matter how many we catch there will always be some out there that we cannot catch no matter how hard we try!
The charachters conversation was very real and authentic because how many little boys do you know have had it that rough and you are taking care of him for the summer?
My favorite part of the story was when David said "Can it be forever?" the boy whispered.
"What?" Daisy asked.
"I never want to go back, please don't send me back!" David responded. Daisy's heart melted again. This poor boy seemed to have been through a lot.
"I won't... I promise" she said." I think that it was so sweet and comforting to David to have someone like Daisy that would never ever let him go back to someone like his mother who did those horrible things to him.
I think everything was used very well throughout the story except the separating of paragraphs.
I think that maybe next time Jessica could go into a little more detail about scenery not just in one area but in all of the areas where the scenery changed. I also think that she could've had a longer more indepth conversation between David and Daisy.
Jess, I thought that your story was mad good!! The entire thing was very well written,and the context was great.
I really liked the part when Daisy was telling David that he didn't deserve to be getting beaten or abused.It's totally true! People like David's mom are sick and twisted!And the whole story was very realistic, unlike some of the other story/essays.Great job!!
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